21 February 2019

Looses -> loses

Source: I forget, but it is kind of an undergraduate thesis written about translation between English-Indonesian telling the story of Alice in the Wonderland analyzed using Baker's idiomatic translation method.

"Kesalahan Fatal" Kompas.com Merujuk Data

"Fatal Error" Kompas.com in Referring Data

 

Pada data yang dituliskan per 11 Desember 2018, seperti tertera diatas, tertulis pengguna Internet di Indonesia mencapai 143,26 miliar orang.

 

In the data provided per 11 December 2018,  as posted above, it is written that the Internet users in Indonesia has reached 143.26 billion people.

 

Bandingkan dengan ini:

 

Jumlah penduduk Indonesia di tahun 2017 saja hanya 264 juta jiwa, bagaimana mungkin jumlah pengguna Internet di Indonesia mencapai 143,26 miliar orang?

 

The total of Indonesian population in 2017 was only 264 million, how come the total of Internet users in Indonesia could reach 143.26 billion people?

 

Mari kita lihat berita lain dari Kompas.com:

Let's review other news from Kompas.com:

Dapat kita lihat disini bahwa terjadi kesalahan fatal Kompas.com menuliskan data referensi, dimana pengguna Internet di Indonesia seharusnya adalah 143,26 juta orang, bukan 143,26 miliar orang.

We can see here that Kompas.com has referred to a wrong reference data (there's a fatal error), where the total Internet users in Indonesia should be 143.26 million people, not 143.26 billion people.

Analisis Kesalahan dan Solusi Pembelajaran :

Berikut hanyalah asumsi penulis, namun terkadang seringkali para pemelajar/pengguna bahasa Inggris di Indonesia mungkin bisa jadi lengah

Million seharusnya memiliki padanan kata Juta (bukan miliar/milyar) 

sementara,

Billion seharusnya memiliki padanan kata Miliar (bukan biliun/bilyun)

1 juta = 1.000.000 - bahasa Indonesia
1 million = 1,000,000 - English

1 miliar = 1.000.000.000 - bahasa Indonesia
1 billion = 1,000,000,000 (1 milliard - British) - English

1 biliun = 1.000.000.000.000 - bahasa Indonesia
1 trillion = 1,000,000,000,000  - English

Demikian post saya hari ini, semoga membantu :).

Catatan Bahasa Indonesia
5 Oktober 2018

Kepala kucing merah makan buntut ikan mati.

Interpretasi:
1.Kepala [dari geng] kucing [yang berwarna] merah [gara-gara] makan buntut ikan [jadi] mati.

1.Kepala [dari geng] kucing [yang berwarna] merah makan buntut ikan mati.

2.Kepala [dari geng] kucing [jadi] merah [gara-gara] makan buntut ikan [jadi] mati.

2.Kepala [dari geng] kucing [jadi] merah [gara-gara] makan buntut ikan mati.

3.Kepala kucing [jadi] merah [gara-gara] makan buntut ikan [jadi] mati.

3.Kepala kucing [jadi] merah [gara-gara] makan buntut ikan mati.

4.[Bagian] Kepala[nya doang] [dari] kucing [berwarna] merah makan buntut ikan [jadi]mati.

4.[Bagian] Kepala[nya doang] [dari] kucing [berwarna] merah makan buntut ikan mati.

Inspirasi dari

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Kosakata Baru:
1.Kreta/kereta [Medan/Melayu] =  sepeda motor [Bahasa Indonesia]
2.Letak [Medan] = taruh [Bahasa Indonesia]
3.Pusing[Melayu] = putar/berputar [Bahasa Indonesia]

木曜日、2018年5月7日

Translation Contest (English - Indonesian)

Thursday, 7/5/2018

Source: Proz.com (only for member)

– People crave silence, yet are unnerved by it, The Economist

 

 

“The Sounds of Silence”

 
A theme of the age, at least in the developed world, is that people crave silence and can find none. The roar of traffic, the ceaseless beep of phones, digital announcements in buses and trains, TV sets blaring even in empty offices, are an endless battery and distraction. The human race is exhausting itself with noise and longs for its opposite—whether in the wilds, on the wide ocean or in some retreat dedicated to stillness and concentration. Alain Corbin, a history professor, writes from his refuge in the Sorbonne, and Erling Kagge, a Norwegian explorer, from his memories of the wastes of Antarctica, where both have tried to escape.

And yet, as Mr Corbin points out in "A History of Silence", there is probably no more noise than there used to be. Before pneumatic tyres, city streets were full of the deafening clang of metal-rimmed wheels and horseshoes on stone. Before voluntary isolation on mobile phones, buses and trains rang with conversation. Newspaper-sellers did not leave their wares in a mute pile, but advertised them at top volume, as did vendors of cherries, violets and fresh mackerel. The theatre and the opera were a chaos of huzzahs and barracking. Even in the countryside, peasants sang as they drudged. They don’t sing now.

What has changed is not so much the level of noise, which previous centuries also complained about, but the level of distraction, which occupies the space that silence might invade. There looms another paradox, because when it does invade—in the depths of a pine forest, in the naked desert, in a suddenly vacated room—it often proves unnerving rather than welcome. Dread creeps in; the ear instinctively fastens on anything, whether fire-hiss or bird call or susurrus of leaves, that will save it from this unknown emptiness. People want silence, but not that much. 

Indonesian translation:

Sebuah tema generasi, setidaknya di negara maju, yang menunjukkan bahwa orang mendambakan keheningan dan tidak dapat menemukannya. Suara bising lalu lintas, suara telepon yang tak henti-hentinya berbunyi, suara pengumuman digital di bis dan kereta, suara perangkat televisi yang dipasang hingga memekakkan telinga bahkan dalam keadaan kantor kosong, adalah serangan mental tidak langsung dan gangguan psikologis tanpa henti. Manusia menghabiskan hidupnya dalam suara bising dan mendambakan hal sebaliknya—apakah dalam hutan rimba, samudera luas, atau di tempat retret yang dikhususkan untuk ketenangan dan pemusatan konsentrasi. Alain Corbin, seorang profesor sejarah, menulis dari tempat pengungsiannya di Sorbonne, dan Erling Kagge, seorang penjelajah berkebangsaan Norwegia, dari ingatannya saat menjelajah dataran tandus Antartika, tempat asal kedua orang ini telah mencoba melarikan diri.

Namun demikian, seperti Tuan Corbin tunjukkan dalam karya berjudul “A History of Silence (Sejarah dari Keheningan)”, saat ini mungkin tidak ada lagi suara bising seperti yang dahulu kala. Sebelum ditemukannya ban angin (pneumatik), jalan-jalan di kota besar dahulu penuh dengan suara bising yang memekakkan telinga berasal dari bunyi roda berlapiskan logam dan bunyi ketoplak sepatu kuda yang bertubrukan dengan batu. Sebelum diberlakukan larangan penggunaan telepon genggam secara sengaja, bis dan kereta penuh dengan suara percakapan telepon. Para penjual koran tidak meninggalkan barang dagangan mereka dalam tumpukan bisu, namun mengiklankannya dengan suara keras-keras, sebagaimana juga dilakukan pedagang buah cheri, pedagang bunga violet dan pedagang ikan makarel segar. Teater dan opera berada dalam kondisi kisruh penuh dengan suara gemuruh sorak-sorai dan suara teriakan penonton. Bahkan di wilayah pedesaan, para petani saat itu bernyanyi sambil bekerja membanting tulang. Mereka tidak bernyanyi lagi sekarang.

Apa yang berubah bukanlah seberapa keras tingkat suara bisingnya, ketika generasi seabad sebelumnya juga keluhkan, namun tingkat gangguannya, tempat kebisingan memenuhi ruang tersebut dimana keheningan mungkin menyerbu. Disitu terjadi suatu kondisi paradoks lainnya, karena ketika suara bising ini benar-benar menyerbu— misalnya di kedalaman hutan pinus, di padang hamparan pasir, di sebuah ruangan yang dikosongkan tiba-tiba — kondisi ini biasanya menimbulkan rasa takut lebih dibandingkan dengan rasa hangat. Rasa ngeri mulai merasuk; syaraf telinga secara naluri menegang bereaksi terhadap suara sekecil apapun, entah bunyi desis-api atau suara cericip burung ataupun suara gemerisik dedaunan, yang akan menghindarkan perasaan ngeri dari kehampaan suara yang sebelumnya tidak dikenali ini. Orang menginginkan keheningan, namun tidak terlalu hening.

 
 Comment:
 

It's a pity .. I don't have any ready cash to join the competition to qualify.... Well, since I don't have enough bucks to buy the subscription in Proz.com membership, I'll just post my translation result here. Feel free to comment/input/constructive criticism here.

Most probably I also didn't see any actual benefits (as stated) on the ads - and it's quite expensive here if you convert it to Rupiah (which is around Rp.1.724.520/Rp. 2.586.600) ($120/$180 per year)) - and it's not even the Pro version/Business version). I know probably you think I'm stingy but I have to be thrifty to count all the benefits of the membership compared to if I use the money for something else...
Source: https://www.proz.com/translation-contests/44#about_source_texts

February 22nd, 2018

Today's Word of Day
Mengelantang (verba) = menjemur (kain dan sebagainya) di bawah terik matahari; Se
Kata dasar = kelantang

Mengelantang(verba) = memutihkan pakaian
->Bleach, whiten, blanch/blench
->漂白 (vs); 晒す(v5tr)

Penambahan makna:
Mengelantang pekerjaan = memeriksa secara mendetail mengenai pekerjaan yang akan dilakukan
-> scrutinize, audit, inspect
-> 眇める(v1,vt)

January 28, 2018

Today's Proofreading

 Proofreading:

1.Possess -> possesses [Unnatural]
human -> Human
Shorter version:
Minimum Bachelor degree in Human Resource Management, Humanities, Law, Psychology or equivalent.
OR
Has/Hold a Bachelor degree in Human Resource Management, Humanities, Law, Psychology or equivalent.

Possess doesn't collocate well with degree in this context. (possess knowledge/have an ownership of, or enter into and control, as of emotions/ideas)

2.Communication in English is a mush\ -> mushy? Well, I wouldn't like to communicate English in 'as mushy as a Hallmark valentine'. (I imagine a mush in any soft or soggy mass xD).

Revised:  Communication in English is a must.

3.Have a good knowledge of 'UU Ketanagkerjan' -> Have a good knowledge of Labour Law(s)/Employment Law(s)/Manpower Law(s) -> depends on what you want to convey.
ect -> etc.
Ketanagkerjan -> Ketenagakerjaan

4.At least 2 years (instead of 2 Year(s))

5.Willing to be located ..

6.Willing to work in shift
(shifting means you are changing continuously).

Jobdesk

1. Prepares employee contract and employee profiling
[NOT proffer fling ->Present/Propose a filing??? > propose an entering of a legal document into the public record?? or act/using a file???]

2.Manages HR Document and HR profiling

3.Keep (company's) confidential data secure.
[NOT securely ... ]

4.Recruitment and Placement
[of WHAT?]
Revision: Employee recruitment and placement

5.Willing to work in shift (with shift system.. at least acceptable but not common)

Source: https://www.jobstreet.co.id/en/job/assistant-hr-operation-bandara-soekarno-hatta-2340114?fr=21

January 25, 2018

Editing/Proofreading

PT.Dexa Medica

Act Profesionally :  Profesionally -> Professionally.

Act Profesionally sounds like an actor that is told to 'perform' when s/he underperfoms.
Tips: Avoid ambiguous phrase.

Suggestion:
Our Professional Code/Rules of Conduct  (in Business)

Original
a demonstration of dedication to working smart and with profesionalism emphasizing honesty and integrity

Revised:
Showing dedication by working smartly and professionally with honesty and integrity.

Notes:
The word "demonstration" here is not (really) compatible with "dedication". Using "show" will make the sentence flow better.  

 Glaring mistake: nurturning -> nurturing

Deal with Care may sound ambiguous, it can mean to 'deal with a customer in (non-)caring way' or in negative connotation it can mean 'deal something behind the table so that the patient/customer is taken care of (no complaint please!)'. I feel guilty using 'of' at the end of sentence, but to emphasize my point of 'being taken care of' so I leave it at that.

How about:
"Serve with Care" sounds much more natural and better, especially in Health Care Industry where you sell your service, not your dealings or financial benefits for all your stakeholders.

We are always encouraged to nurture our relationship by 'Seeking first to understand' and  'Treating others with respect' (in all aspects of business) so that we can always arrive at/reach a mutually beneficial agreement (for all parties involved).
 

Original:
Expertise for The Promotion of Health
Providing better health care by applying expertise was the foundation on which its founder built this company



Revised (Options):
Promoting Your Health with Our Expertise
Promoting Your Health using Our Expertise
Your Health Promotion is Our Expertise
Our Expertise is in Your Health Promotion

"Providing/Serving you with better health care by lending our expertise" has been the reason why our founder built this company.

 Strive for excellence
Committed to provide the best values for and in compliance with our internal and external customer by exercising prudence and maintaining compliance at all time.
(I still feel this sentence at best, superfluous).

Source:
http://www.dexa-medica.com

 

3 Januari 2018

IDNtimes

Perubahan kata kita-> kami

Proofreading 20 November 2017
-BPS Publication-

#1.Economics = The branch of social science that deals with the production and distribution and consumption of goods and services and their management.(the knowledge field) - it doesn't fit the context well.
Economy = The system of production and distribution and consumption.(Wordweb)
In this context, which shows overall Indonesia's Economy performance, economy is better suited to the context.
However, in this phrase, people usually prefer use 'economic', the adjective form, as the catchphrase to denote the indicator which shows the economy performance.
~Economic Indicator
Source: https://www.investopedia.com/terms/e/economic_indicator.asp
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/economic-indicator

#2.Gambar Kulit - Cover Design
Walaupun semua dari kita orang Indonesia akan mengerti maksud dari frase ini, akan lebih afdol jika menggunakan:

Desain Sampul (literal translation) - atau - Gambar Sampul dibandingkan dengan Gambar Kulit''
https://kbbi.kemdikbud.go.id/entri/gambar%20sampul
:gambar yang dimuat pada kulit muka suatu majalah, biasanya gambar mengenai laporan utama atau khusus terbitan itu;






#3.Prohibitted (x)
Should be prohibited. (self-explanatory)
Adj.That has been forbidden; banned.
https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/definition/prohibited

#4.Indikator -> Indicator(v)
The editor should pay attention to the publication more...(especially not to confuse the part that should be Bahasa or English)