7 April 2019
2019年4月7日
The Adjectives

Today, I found a fatal mistake that may mislead English learner, and since the website in question is a web tailored for English learning, it is doubly so.
If you say confused words it means that the "word" has a feeling that make him/her/it confused. However, if you say confusing words it means that the "word" looks "confusing", viewed from people outside/external parties.


Hari ini, saya menemukan sebuah kesalahan fatal yang bisa saja menyesatkan pembelajar bahasa  Inggris dalam mengerti maksud dari "confusing words". Terlebih lagi, situs web yang bersangkutan adalah situs yang memang dibuat untuk belajar bahasa Inggris. > wordsmile.

In addition, the "commonly" adverb looks out of place, it should be: "common confusing words"

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The problem is the elusive "-ed, and -ing" adjectives, which sometimes make learner confused. I think.. let the picture says everything ;).
Masalahnya adalah kata sifat (adjective) berakhiran "-ed dan -ing", yang terkadang membuat pembelajar bingung. Biarkan gambar berbicara saya pikir ;):

Source: woodwardenglish.com

Please drop some comments when you can :D.
 

Again, don't swallow/stomach/gulp/ everything that you study without possibly think that, is this correct? hmm..Always cultivate critical thinking in your learning and Happy studying! ;).

13 December 2018

#Daily Reads

1.doens't => doesn't
2.(combination of) ...and...
from a wound here is starting with preposition which is awkward.
They produce offspring by means of their blood combination, pure blood, wound(s), a special and natural place that can be found in this world,....where the new life would gestate in a cocoon-like structure.

must be found means that you definitely need the special natural place to have an offspring unless stated otherwise. (well if that is what you mean then okay). I find that the phrase: must be found is  very strong phrase that may limit your writing.
However, if you say:
can be found means that there is a resource in that special natural place or a special/natural place where you can have offspring. So it's not limited to one special/natural place.
[Okay this must be found/can be found is up to you since you are the one who writes the story]

3. althought => although
4. process. This should be ended with full stop instead of comma.
.... reproduction process. I didn't want....
5. These comma (,) + and positions are awkward. This also makes the sentence feels fractured because:
"I didn't want to make one gender to be at a disadvantage because of reproduction.... and also to make the process easier??

We are still talking about WHY you didn't want one gender to be at a disadvantage... and SUDDENLY you are talking about MAKING THE PROCESS easier ?? What process?

To avoid this kind of fractured sentence, you can rewrite into:

I didn't want to make one gender to be at a disadvantage because of reproduction process. I also wanted to make the reproduction process easier, at least physically.

OR

I wanted to make the reproduction process at least physically easier, especially when talking about how I didn't want to make one gender to be at a disadvantage because of it.

Note: You can't combine these two "reproduction process" into one single sentence with "and", without specifically mention 'reproduction process' because the clause position is different.
Your clause will have to be in the same position to make these more streamlined (i.e.: referring main clause to main clause with correct structure).

Source: https://worldbuilding.stackexchange.com/questions/132565/can-a-genderless-race-have-sex


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Thoughs -> Thoughts

Source:  https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=chukMdRUt24

at min.3:17. 

Source:http://journals.ums.ac.id/index.php/JEP/article/view/1458/1009

Original Text:

In general, the agricultural sector operators (farmers) have not made the optimum use of the information on the climate. The management is based on the habit. Consequently a lot of losses are suffered such as the crop failure due to floods, droughts or the presence of certain pests. 

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1.  First sentence is talking about agricultural sector operators (farmers) (which haven't made an optimum use of the information on the climate).

Then, second sentence is talking about management which is based on the habit? -> what do you mean by management which is based on the habit? This must be elaborated to make your point across more clearly.

Is this a rigid management  that it's hard to change? or a bad management habit? or what?

Third sentence is talking about a lot of losses as the consequence of the second sentence and first sentence. So, what is the correlation? You need to explain those points in the paragraph. For example:

Consequently, the farmers suffered from a lot of losses in crop harvest due to non-optimal use of climate information related to the work in agriculture. For example: certain pests that pops up in certain climate or weather.

2. Third sentence : you can't say "a lot of losses are suffered "

Grammatically speaking, it's correct. However, semantically it doesn't make sense.

How do losses are suffered? The subject is losses and the passive verb: suffered refers to the losses.

You mean probably the farmers who suffer from the losses. You need to be careful to place your subject, or it can confuse your readers, especially when writing a formal text (research).

January 25, 2018

Editing/Proofreading

PT.Dexa Medica

Act Profesionally :  Profesionally -> Professionally.

Act Profesionally sounds like an actor that is told to 'perform' when s/he underperfoms.
Tips: Avoid ambiguous phrase.

Suggestion:
Our Professional Code/Rules of Conduct  (in Business)

Original
a demonstration of dedication to working smart and with profesionalism emphasizing honesty and integrity

Revised:
Showing dedication by working smartly and professionally with honesty and integrity.

Notes:
The word "demonstration" here is not (really) compatible with "dedication". Using "show" will make the sentence flow better.  

 Glaring mistake: nurturning -> nurturing

Deal with Care may sound ambiguous, it can mean to 'deal with a customer in (non-)caring way' or in negative connotation it can mean 'deal something behind the table so that the patient/customer is taken care of (no complaint please!)'. I feel guilty using 'of' at the end of sentence, but to emphasize my point of 'being taken care of' so I leave it at that.

How about:
"Serve with Care" sounds much more natural and better, especially in Health Care Industry where you sell your service, not your dealings or financial benefits for all your stakeholders.

We are always encouraged to nurture our relationship by 'Seeking first to understand' and  'Treating others with respect' (in all aspects of business) so that we can always arrive at/reach a mutually beneficial agreement (for all parties involved).
 

Original:
Expertise for The Promotion of Health
Providing better health care by applying expertise was the foundation on which its founder built this company



Revised (Options):
Promoting Your Health with Our Expertise
Promoting Your Health using Our Expertise
Your Health Promotion is Our Expertise
Our Expertise is in Your Health Promotion

"Providing/Serving you with better health care by lending our expertise" has been the reason why our founder built this company.

 Strive for excellence
Committed to provide the best values for and in compliance with our internal and external customer by exercising prudence and maintaining compliance at all time.
(I still feel this sentence at best, superfluous).

Source:
http://www.dexa-medica.com

 

September 25th, 2017

Jakarta Post

 

 

 

 

1.Regents/ mayors? to avoid confusion it should be either regents or mayors.

2.'reformasi' here should be italicized since it's in 'Bahasa Indonesia'

or we can also say 'Reform Era' just in the following (below) news:

Kompas, July 2017

Koreksi cetakan (sunting):

Meningkatkan -> meningkat
Meningkatkan membutuhkan obyek penderita (verba transitif)
Meningkat tidak membutuhkan obyek penderita (verba intransitif).


Sumber:
http://tekno.kompas.com/read/2017/07/27/06420037/makin-banyak-pengguna-android-yang-ganti-ke-iphone