Source:http://journals.ums.ac.id/index.php/JEP/article/view/1458/1009
Original Text:
In general, the
agricultural sector operators (farmers) have not made the optimum use of the
information on the climate. The management is based on the habit. Consequently a
lot of losses are suffered such as the crop failure due to floods, droughts or
the presence of certain pests.
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1. First sentence is talking about agricultural sector operators (farmers) (which haven't made an optimum use of the information on the climate).
Then, second sentence is talking about management which is based on the habit? -> what do you mean by management which is based on the habit? This must be elaborated to make your point across more clearly.
Is this a rigid management that it's hard to change? or a bad management habit? or what?
Third sentence is talking about a lot of losses as the consequence of the second sentence and first sentence. So, what is the correlation? You need to explain those points in the paragraph. For example:
Consequently, the farmers suffered from a lot of losses in crop harvest due to non-optimal use of climate information related to the work in agriculture. For example: certain pests that pops up in certain climate or weather.
2. Third sentence : you can't say "a lot of losses are suffered "
Grammatically speaking, it's correct. However, semantically it doesn't make sense.
How do losses are suffered? The subject is losses and the passive verb: suffered refers to the losses.
You mean probably the farmers who suffer from the losses. You need to be careful to place your subject, or it can confuse your readers, especially when writing a formal text (research).
