January 28, 2018

Today's Proofreading

 Proofreading:

1.Possess -> possesses [Unnatural]
human -> Human
Shorter version:
Minimum Bachelor degree in Human Resource Management, Humanities, Law, Psychology or equivalent.
OR
Has/Hold a Bachelor degree in Human Resource Management, Humanities, Law, Psychology or equivalent.

Possess doesn't collocate well with degree in this context. (possess knowledge/have an ownership of, or enter into and control, as of emotions/ideas)

2.Communication in English is a mush\ -> mushy? Well, I wouldn't like to communicate English in 'as mushy as a Hallmark valentine'. (I imagine a mush in any soft or soggy mass xD).

Revised:  Communication in English is a must.

3.Have a good knowledge of 'UU Ketanagkerjan' -> Have a good knowledge of Labour Law(s)/Employment Law(s)/Manpower Law(s) -> depends on what you want to convey.
ect -> etc.
Ketanagkerjan -> Ketenagakerjaan

4.At least 2 years (instead of 2 Year(s))

5.Willing to be located ..

6.Willing to work in shift
(shifting means you are changing continuously).

Jobdesk

1. Prepares employee contract and employee profiling
[NOT proffer fling ->Present/Propose a filing??? > propose an entering of a legal document into the public record?? or act/using a file???]

2.Manages HR Document and HR profiling

3.Keep (company's) confidential data secure.
[NOT securely ... ]

4.Recruitment and Placement
[of WHAT?]
Revision: Employee recruitment and placement

5.Willing to work in shift (with shift system.. at least acceptable but not common)

Source: https://www.jobstreet.co.id/en/job/assistant-hr-operation-bandara-soekarno-hatta-2340114?fr=21